Friday 26 August 2016

Olympic Moment in time







WALT: Describe a moment in time in detail.


My Olympic experience

I heard people yelling and cheering for me as I was sprinting down the track.

I heard breathing from the other runners as they were sprinting up behind me.

I saw flags waving in the wind I was so proud because I saw my flag.

I saw the runners running as fast as they can like their life depends on it.

I saw people everywhere in the stadium they were jumping everywhere.

I felt great and proud because I was winning.

I wondered if my family was watching in Jamaica.

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  2. Hi max,I loved the way you used a amazing feelings and similes.One question why did you choose this person and maybe next time could you tell the persons name your talking about

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  3. I really like this story, Max. You've added heaps of detail and the picture makes me crack up!
    :) Mum

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